Kwing your flow is off or too forced (I'll let you pick).. let the river flow my man, them boulders clogging your stream;). just chill out a bit, you sound like your ranting solving calculations instead of rapping... For someone "like you" study "rap battle parodies" off youtube, if your style was more serious i'd say study ktod, smack, but my point is theres no excuse for dropping wack bars homie... this aint a white or black thing, a nerdy or gangster thing, its none of that.... see those dudes off that parody are nerdy have no delivery but still deliver bars..theres really no excuse. Blest you won, easy victory (and I aint being bias) but make sure you master some parts better like around 2:50 for example, flow aint really a problem to you.. I was surprised when it sounded shaky at the part. Shiiit but knowing you... you probably rushed the verse or sum shit cuz I heard you snap harder than this. Good job doe +1 Blest