Dunno what Ryuzaki means..
But...Good melody, Good everything.. The bass could've went down harder though.
Try being a lil more creative with the Bass. You should've made the guitar an 8 bar melody at some points instead of just doing the ole' 4bar for 4bar trick. I still think you can add more to this (I've been saying this alot because after hearing the shit my producers made for my album.. shit.. They make this look like baby food, due to the complexity of the beats they made).. but heck, you know how to make a beat (no doubt).. but take it to the next level mayne. Make an "instrumental".
Step outside the box mayne.
All I hear is
Keys
eletric Guitar
couple cymbals
some hits from here to there..
Pretty hard drumset sample
acostic guitar somewhere
You'll be able to impress other people, but I still hear some more potential you haven't unlocked yet. I dunno how to put it into words.. but try getting your "actual thoughts onto track".
You missing some breakdowns too mayne.
Anyways, Good shit. And yo, your getting into video game designing? That's wuzzup mayne. When I was a jit, that used to be my dream. To make my own video game hehe.. Shit.. But from the designs I saw on your page.. if you could make a video game with those same exact graphics as the one on your page (and not just through cut scenes bruh, but through actual gameplay) I'll cry :')
lol
-RMP